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To Swear (or not to swear)?

23 May
Swear

Swear (Photo credit: Wikipedia)

Reading an utterly fabulous post over at The Daily Post got me thinking about swearing and, in particular, how my characters do it.

http://dailypost.wordpress.com/2012/05/17/swearing/

Now I’m on the pro-swearing side, but I must admit, with my first attempt at a novel I steered well clear of swearing.  I didn’t want to upset anyone, after all.  And the story I ended up with was sickly-sweet: with an overload of sugar and not much depth.  And absolutely no swearing.

Of course, I’m not saying swearing is necessary to give characters depth, but since that first attempt at a novel I’ve ignored my inner swearing-sensor and let my characters swear whenever it seems right for them.

And, for me, that’s the key thing: when it’s right for them.

It shouldn’t be forced, or just chucked in like a cheap special effect.  Swearing should be something that shows the character, is true to their way of reacting to the situations they’re in, and the words they choose fit with their use of language.

So as a result some of my characters swear in dialogue, some never swear in dialogue but do think it.  And some don’t swear in any form.

What’s right for your characters:  to swear, or not to swear?

 

Inspiration: which authors do it for you?

20 May
my books

my books

I’ve always been a reader.  In fact, I can’t remember ever not reading.  As a child I loved anything with ponies in – Silver Snaffles by Primrose Cumming was a particular favourite – and anything with adventure.  I always had at least one Famous Five, Narnia or Secret Seven book on the go.

As I got into my teens, I became addicted to the Bond books (Ian Fleming) and Sherlock Holmes (Arthur Conan Doyle). Of course, whenever I could, I’d also sneak a peak at a Jilly Cooper or two – so wonderfully racy.  But the stories which have always fascinated me have been the ones that are quick-paced, complex, and difficult to solve/predict.

Now, as a writer, I’m inspired by authors who can sweep me up in their story, who keep me up at night (or have me day-dreaming in a day-job meeting) trying to fathom out ‘who done-it’ or, more intriguingly, ‘why done-it’.

And most of all, I’m inspired by those authors who have me thinking: damn, why the hell didn’t I think of that? Or marvelling at the fabulously web-like complexity of their plot.

So, who are these authors?

Well, there’s a range …

For seat-of-your-pants action and intrigue: Jeff Abbott, Lee Child, Dan Brown, Peter James, Michael Cordy, JL Carrell and Michael Crichton.

For beautiful prose and impactful themes: Daphne du Maurier, Rosamund Lupton, Jodie Picoult and Stephen Fry.

For unusual ideas and fascinating exploration: Michael Crichton, SJ Watson, Michael Cordy and Kyle Mills.

For the most amazingly strong POV voice: Jeff Lindsay

But if I had to pick one, the author whose books I can never put down, that get me thinking, and that I return to again and again – it’s Michael Crichton.

I’ve always found the way Crichton takes near-future science and weaves it into the plot of thrillers like Jurassic Park, Timeline, Prey and Next intriguing, interesting, and frankly rather scary.

In thrillers like A Case of Need and Disclosure, he takes the ‘normal’ worlds of Medical and Business and turns the worlds of the characters who inhabit them upside down in a highly believable way.

Then, in stories like A State of Fear he takes current science and shows what could happen if you take opposing sides of the global warming debate and have the characters take it to its farthest, and most dramatic, conclusion.

And that is, I think, why he is my greatest inspiration: whatever the initial idea, the themes of the story, or the unusual setting, he always takes the situation from normal day-to-day all the way to ‘what’s the worst that could happen?’

And it always hooks me, and gets me thinking.

Who inspires you?

This post has been Guest Blogged over at the fabulous Nomad Novelists Writers Group blog

Polishing Up: Dashes, Commas and Colons (oh my!)

19 May
photo of my laptop

photo of my laptop

I seem to be afflicted with RCS – Random Comma Syndrome.

I’ll be typing away, happily transcribing my story, when for no reason at all I’m seized with the overwhelming desire to throw in a comma!

And that’s fine, perhaps, when writing a first draft.  It’s even okay, I guess, to allow a few random blighters to remain in the second draft.  But now, on my fifth (and hopefully final) draft, I really must eliminate all the superfluous commas lurking in my manuscript.

But how?  They’ve survived this long, what makes me think I’ll spot them now?

Well, I’ve decided draft five is a ‘three read draft’.  Basically, this means I’m going to comb through the draft three times, each time hunting out a set of specific misdemeanours.

And that’s right, you’ve guessed it.  My first read through is all about Dashes, Commas and Colons.

Specifically, I’m working on:

  • Hunting down and removing all the random commas (and, of course, adding a comma or two in places that really need them)
  • Editing out the dashes wherever possible.  I have a strange love of those little horizontal lines, and as a result some paragraphs can look mighty strange!
  • Checking that when I’ve used a semi-colon I really do need one.  As with dashes, above.  I seem to have a strange fondness for the semi-colon!

I’ve been working on this read through a couple of weeks now, and have given myself the deadline of 24th May to have it finished.  Then, with draft 5.1 complete, it’ll be on to my next read through.

In draft 5.2 I’ll be focusing on  Dialogue and Thought, but more about that later …

Structural Work: paragraphs in progress

21 Apr
Extensive scaffolding on a building in downtow...

Extensive scaffolding on a building in downtown Cincinnati, Ohio. (Photo credit: Wikipedia)

I’m reading J.L. Carrell’s ‘The Shakespeare Secret’ at the moment and am totally in awe.  Every paragraph is like a mini work of art.  They flow perfectly.  Each one has a specific (and eloquent) purpose.

So with this observation in mind, I had a flick through my WIP.

Oh dear.  I could see some major reconstruction was needed for certain paragraphs.

The problem?

Well, the thing is, a paragraph isn’t just a load of random sentences clipped together so they look neat.  It should be like a miniature story in its own right.  Logically ordered.  Making a point.

So having spotted the problem, I had to fix it … I rolled my sleeves up and got on with the job.

Here’s an example:  I changed this:

Patrick hesitated in the doorway of the Biological Science office.  The usually vacant atrium was crammed full with people.  It looked so unnatural, thought Patrick. Watching the semi-drunk scientists swaying out of time to the dance music reminded him of the Sci-Fi Fan Convention disco he’d visited as a teenager.  Only worse.

To this:

God, it’s hot, Patrick thought.  There had to be over a hundred people in here, most of them drunk. It reminded him of the Sci-Fi Convention discos he’d attended in his youth: the smell of alcohol, a sticky carpet underfoot, and the sight of adults swaying out-of-time with the music.   He turned to Leo.  ‘Maybe we should just-’

I think the second version gives a better sense of how Patrick feels and what he’s seeing – first through his physical response, then through his observation linked to memory, then to his attempt to persuade his friend that they go.  Better I think.

Of course, then I had to check the other 332 pages …

De-wooding my Dialogue

15 Apr
Aspen trees near Aspen, Colorado

Aspen trees near Aspen, Colorado (Photo credit: Wikipedia)

So here’s the thing.

My plot’s sorted, the pacing seems about right, and the characters all seem fairly ‘real’.  But what about the dialogue?

Well, it’s okay … but.  I’ve recently shared a few scenes with some fellow writers and the combination of reading them out loud, and getting feedback from others, has made me realise I’ve been seeing my dialogue through rose-tinted glasses.

Because now, when I go back and re-read bits of it, I can see there is a woodish air to it. Like it’s standing up straight with its shoulders back, and trying just that little bit too much.

What it needs, I thought, is a quick shot of tequila, or to be told a dirty joke.  Anything to loosen it up a bit!

So in the fourth draft I’ve dusted off my wood-o-metre (used so easily when critiquing the work of others!) and applied it to my own.  And I think it’s working.  There are some of the changes I’ve made:

“It was totally impractical.”

Has become … “It’d never work out.”

“Maybe.  But, given your situation, there’s no time for caution.  If you’re going to go for it, it has to be now.” [I’m desperate to add ‘old chap’ on the end of that one!].

Has been shortened to … “Maybe, but you’re out of time.  Just go for it.”

And (my personal favorite) “It doesn’t feel right.”

Is now … “It’s shit.”

So, what have I learnt?

Well, firstly, real people don’t talk like they’re on a public service broadcast from the fifties (at least not in the setting of my novel).  And, secondly, always read your dialogue out loud, preferably in front of people.  It makes you more conscious of what works and what doesn’t – and is great practice for (hopefully, fingers crossed) those author reading you’ll do in the future.

Editing: are we nearly there yet?

5 Apr

How many drafts make a novel?  One, three, six or more?

Siverstone at the start-finish line

(Photo credit: Wikipedia)

I’m on “that tricky fourth draft”.  That’s the one you start (feeling a tad unmotivated) after you thought you’d cracked it, then had another look and realised it wasn’t ready yet.

So what’s this edit about then?  Well mainly two things:

1. De-wooding the dialogue

2. Refining the paragraph structure

It’s important stuff, highly necessary, and not particularly fun.

So I chucked every mental roadblock I could at it.  Instead of using my writing time productively, I’d be checking Facebook, or thinking I was too tired, or frittering my time away on Twitter, or thinking about a new exciting story, and did I mention Facebook? [repeat to fade].

And then, just over a week ago, I realised I’d spent two months revising 100 pages.  Only 100 pages?  Rubbish!  I was only a third through when I should have done well over half.

So I gave myself a stern talking to, turned off the internet when I was editing, and got on with it!

And so far, so good.  I’m three-quarters through and aiming for a sprint finish over the Easter weekend.

So wish me luck … finish line here I come :-)

Big Bangs and the Art of Preparation

5 Nov
Fireworks

Image via Wikipedia

Tonight, all across the UK, there’ll be firework parties and displays lighting the sky to a chorus of bangs and whistles.

No matter how long each display lasts, be it five minutes or fifty, you can bet that the time it took to prepare for it was at least twice as long.

As a kid, especially when my younger brother and sister were little, my Dad would embrace this tradition and set about creating a little display in our back yard.  For one night only, our garden was transformed into a magical world of dancing Catherine wheels, glorious sparkling fountains, and whiz-bang rockets.  As Dad set off each firework in his pre-determined pattern, Mum kept a close watch on where us little ones twirled our sparklers.  Rain or clear skies, the show always went on.

It strikes me that creating a firework display and creating a work of fiction have some parallels.  Both require longer in the preparation than in the enjoyment .  All the creativity; the plotting and positioning of each key element, the checks and double checks to ensure everything is just right – it all goes on behind the scenes.  And so, when eventually the finished article is presented to the world and (hopefully) enjoyed, everyone marvels at just how effortlessly right it is.

Have a wonderful evening :-)

Hitting the Century

14 Sep
Grape-Shot: 1915 English magazine illustration...

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I’ve done it, I’ve hit the century!

That’s right, finally my current draft has made it past the 100 page mark (121 to be precise); meaning I’m a third of the way through my third draft revisions.  Kind of poetic, I think.

And that has to be a cause for celebration!

So, for tonight anyway, I shall delight in this milestone and celebrate with a cheeky glass of bubbly.

Of course tomorrow it’ll be back to the revisions.

Happy editing!

Review: Before I Go To Sleep by SJ Watson

13 Sep

I’ve just finished reading SJ Watson’s debut novel Before I Go To Sleep, and I felt I just had to blog about it.

The mystery/thriller tells the story of Christine Lucas, a 47 year old woman who forgets her past, her identity and even her own name even time she goes to sleep.  Told partly in journal form, the reader joins Christine on her daily struggle to piece together the aspects of her life – knowledge that most people take for granted. And how, with the help of her daily journal, she begins to piece together the decades that she’s lost.

The writing is beautifully crafted; you feel like you know Christine (perhaps better than she does herself) and you feel her confusion, her frustration and the highs and lows of as she finds out about her life.

But there is much more to the novel than an interesting character study.  From the end of Part One Christine’s already scattered world is plunged into mistrust as she discovers the note she wrote to herself in her journal ‘Don’t Trust Ben’ (her husband).  From here on her quest takes on a new meaning, searching to uncover the reason behind her cryptic note, and the truth about her lost son and the mysterious accident which caused her condition.

As the tension mounted, I found myself trying to guess the end and, like Christine, didn’t know which characters to trust.  Brilliantly paced, artfully suspenseful, with a clever twist at the end, this story had me racing through the pages.  I devoured it in one weekend.

Highly recommended.

Rabbit versus Snail: who edits quickest?

12 Sep
Snail race

Image by nojhan via Flickr

Oh, THAT’S Where I Left My Track!.

It’s so easy to be distracted.  And, even with the best of intentions, sometimes life just takes over.  Or ‘the day job’ does.

In their fabulous blogpost S.C.Green blogs about how easy it is to delay productivity and get pulled off track.  At the end he asks the question “Have you ever got derailed and struggled your way back?”  It got me to thinking about my writing process …

I’m one of those people who plans upfront, then once I’ve got the chapter outline sorted, writes the first draft at full pace.  My current WIP first draft took three months start to finish.

And then comes the editing.  The second draft seemed to go slow – editing out all the unnecessary waffle and clichés I’d put in as I sped through the first draft.  But, if the second draft was snail-like in speed compared to the rabbit-like first draft, the third draft is an elderly snail who gets out of breath after less than a minute!

So, there’s no doubt about it, for me editing is a long haul task.  And the thing about long haul is it’s super easy to get distracted – Twitter, Facebook, a new novel by one of my favourite authors, the garden, whatever! The payoff takes such a long time with editing it gets me yearning for something more immediate.

But, as S.C.Green says, no matter how many excuses I can come up with, the editing isn’t going to do itself.  Meaning – however slow an editing snail I am, I have to keep focusing on my track or I’ll never reach my destination.

I guess that’s the thing with writing – you’ll never be a novelist unless you actually finish the damn thing!

Happy writing :-)

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