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Cut the Waffle: polishing my pitch

19 Mar

 

Filming!

So the Festival of Writing at York is nearly here – Yippee!  This time next week I’ll be at the gala dinner, schmoozing with all the other writerly types.

 

But before I go, I still need to polish up my pitch for the agent sessions. And it’s nearly ready.

As I practiced in front of the mirror – making sure I could remember the words without too many pauses – I remembered a filming session I took part in last summer.  It was for a training film, and I had to deliver about ten lines to camera whilst walking along a pathway.

Sounds easy?  Was it heck! Believe me, as a total rookie at talking to camera (not to mention having the director, camera person and sound person watching me!) it was so much harder than the professionals make it look.

Firstly I had to remember words.  That was fine, until I had to say it to the camera.  At that point I either talked too fast or walked too slowly.  Or, just when I’d nearly got to the end of my lines, I’d forget a line.  So it would be straight back to the beginning to try again.  I think it took eleven takes in the end!

But the thing that I learnt from the whole experience – which was actually pretty exciting, even if rather nerve-racking – was that the script had to be ‘tight’.  The words had to be pared down to the minimum.  And that when we’d got the sentences polished down to the minimum, uncomplicated, straight-forward lines we could, then the piece had the maximum impact.

And so, as I’ve been polishing up my pitch, which is now only two sentences long, I remembered the three words that my colleague said in reflection of our whole filming experience:

Waffle is Bad!

Epic Fail: Proof-reading

20 Feb
2008-01-26 (Editing a paper) - 31

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Okay, so as I mentioned yesterday, I’m putting together my submission for the 1-2-1s at the Festival of Writing in York.

Along with the dreaded one-page introduction (think query letter) I’ll be sending in my first chapter.

Now I’ve only just started the second draft of my WIP, so the first chapter still needs quite a bit of polishing.  But having read through it, edited it, read through it again, and edited it (again), I thought it must be fairly error free, right?

Wrong.  Epic-fail wrong.

And the worst thing is I didn’t even spot it myself!

Thinking the first chapter was nearly ready, I asked my partner to read it.  I thought he’d probably find the odd comma in the wrong place, but nothing major.

The first sign of my error was my partner sniggering as he read.  [Please note: my WIP is not a comedy].  When I asked him the cause of his amusement he pointed to a piece of description of my main character.  A description of the character’s clothing to be precise.

And there it was.  Not a spelling mistake exactly, but something much worse.  I had described my character as wearing a “t-shit”.

A t-shit!

What was a potential agent going to make of that?  It sure wasn’t going to impress them.

But it’s okay.  I’ve corrected it.  And – fingers crossed – the first chapter is now error free.  The only thing is, what should I do about the other 80,000 words of my novel?

I’ve heard that reading out loud is good for spotting errors.  So, gin and tonic in hand, here I go …

 

 

Super-sexy Query Letters

19 Feb
And What shall I Write

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It’s official:

I hate writing query letters.

Or to be more specific, “a one page introduction to me and my book”.  But I’ve got to get over my loathing, because next week I need to send one out.

On March 25th – 27th I’m attending the fantastic Festival of Writing at York, organised by the wonderful folks at The Writers Workshop.  As part of the package, unpublished writers like me get to pitch to two agents, publishers or book doctors.  In preparation for the pitch, I have to send the one-page introduction and the first chapter of my WIP.

It’s an awesome opportunity, but it’s also the cause of many hours of soul searching, drafting and deleting as I try to produce the “perfect, knock-em-out, super-sexy query letter”.

So why does one page matter so much?

Well, to start with, IT JUST DOES!  And, secondly, it’s because it’s the first contact I’ll have with this haloed individual, the first piece of my writing they’ll read, and therefore the thing that will create their first impression of me.

So it has to be perfect – the right tone, enough (but not too much) information about me, and a short synopsis of my WIP.  I’ve been working on it for over three hours now and so far I’ve got less than twenty words.  I did have more.  Then I deleted them!

But, I think help is at hand.  I’ve found a wonderful website  http://queryshark.blogspot.com/ On the website there’s all sort of pithy advice on the type of thing that works and that doesn’t work in query letters.

So, that’s quite enough displacement activity on the blog for now.  It’s time to crack on with my “information page”.  Wish me luck!

 

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